When I first wrote my first draft, I wrote it in a hurry to really just get done with it. I usually start my essays good. I took some time writing my introduction, but pieced the second paragraph together. After you gave the commentary back, and we had the peer review, I wrote my essay over. I kept my introduction, added stuff, and wrote the rest over. Your commentary made the most difference to me. It required me to get in more depth to have a decent paper.
It was not very difficult to choose my topic. As you know, I have written on this topic before. Using this topic, I was able to defend my belief strongly. I can relate to this topic because I've seen kids affected by violent video games.
I feel like my writing needs to be in more depth. I have trouble focusing after about the third paragraph, and my conclusions need work.
The wiki's really helped. I was able to look back at them and put my paper together. It takes less time to look up research when you can look at what you have already written. The wikis also helped me with choosing liable research and citing my sources.
I feel like i wrote on a personal level and that it presented a more interesting argument.
